https://youtu.be/PjaZn__Pw60
Here is the link now it will work. I had to use my parents youtube page because I didn't want the video to go public on my personal page.
Here is the link now it will work. I had to use my parents youtube page because I didn't want the video to go public on my personal page.
From Seth-- Some really fantastic formal decisions with this! You have a natural handle about using rhythmic shifts to keep the viewer hooked-- stop-motion sleeping scene into some footage with great framing like the foot eye-level shots. It also works with the third-person to first-person shots. I like the close-up of the remote during the tv scene but that could benefit from some scale shifts as well-- maybe a close-up or two of the tv content. For the sandwich sequence, some visually interesting shots when you're getting the components of the sandwich but maybe just include some and not all of them. Could you add any vantage points that you did not include? Maybe zooming into the jars or seeing partially through the plastic bag? The making and cutting of the sandwich could benefit from more scale differences. You are in the middleground throughout so maybe you could have a shot or two zooming in or zooming out? The computer scene is good especially when it bounces from first-person to the shot from beyond the arm of the chair (great composition!) but this could maybe be improved with a zoom in or two from the screen or some other break?
ReplyDeleteOverall, formally, you are doing very well with this but it's the content that I think you need to articulate a bit more. A day in the life of? Richness of experience in banality? I think you should be able to describe what you really want to viewer to get out of the piece. How you want to the viewer to read and understand the piece. Once you do this, you can find those ever-important crescendo moments! Remember, with design theory, the viewer needs visual unity AND variety. This is why most songs have a "hook" and most narratives have highs and lows. Once you decide more about the content that will allow you to enhance the narrative. Great work!